Week 8 Reflections

This week’s lesson was a pretty interesting one where we had to split up into groups and act in different scenes pending out what we were given. It was a total contrast to last week’s assignment as we were unable to use any dialogue at all. This definitely posed as a great challenge as dialogue is a primary source of motivation for a story. Rebecca and I got a shock when we saw our “scripts”. Rebecca was to be expecting a proposal from me while I was supposed to be thinking of breaking up with her. We knew from the start it wasn’t going to be easy and sure enough, it was up to our expectations.

Within a couple of minutes, we had already thought of Rebecca’s actions and her facial expressions in the scene and it was pretty easy, but when it came to mine, it was simply catastrophic. Too much conflict might lead to audience to think that it is simple a couple quarrelling  and at the same time, actions too subtle might not be picked up by the audience at all. Finally we came up with an idea, not a very good one though. I, will sit down and look troubled and worried. At the same time, I’ll be fiddling with a pen in my hand and break it into half, sort of a symbolism for the happening. However, the action was too subtle and it kind of wasn’t noticed at all. Many people had Rebecca’s part correct but most of them thought that I was actually nervous about proposing to her actually.

Our acting didn’t really bring out the point whereby actions speak louder than words however in Kane’s group, it sure did. Kane’s acting with Hari aas well as Annabelle, was simply fantastic and almost of us got their point. It was truly a pretty fun class where we made a fool out of ourselves, yet learning something at the same time. As an end, this are my notes for the week.

Story = Action

Any kind of activity, movement and interaction of characters with their surroundings.

Talking about feelings isn’t as powerful illustrating what is felt through actions

Actions are manifestations of behaviour

Human emotions are understood by watching their actions and reactions of characters.

Action = more interesting, more realistic

Dynamic Action = enriches the experience of the audience by building emotional relationship between characters and audience

Week 7 reflections

This week we learnt about the difference between memory and experience as well as dialogue, and the functions of dialogue.

Memory Vs Experience

Memory: It is something that is shaped in the mind through time.
Experience: Something that actually happened.

Functions of Dialogue: Show personalities
Communicates emotions
Tells of past or future events
Reveals new information (twists) to the audience, defy expectations
Expresses culture, shows time and place as well (eg: singlish = Singaporean)

-    Dialogue reveals character
-    Dialogue establishes relationships between characters. (attitudes, opinions acting as opposition to one another).
-    Effective dialogue motivates the movement of the story.
-    Conveys essential exposition.
-    Characters will talk about what happened, establishing the story lines.
-    Exposition is important information that will not be understood unless told by characters to the audiences. (plot based information that audiences need to know)
-    Dialogue ties script together.  (tie scenes together)
-    Doesn’t have to be voice over, could just be narration.

Con’s of Dialogue

•    Tell not show.
•    Spoils the mood of the show if it is inappropriate.
•    Assumes people know information and causes confusion.
•    Corny dialogue.

Common mistakes

-    Never tell the audience what they can see for themselves
-    Dialogue cannot substitute action.
-    Dialogue shouldn’t sound like real talking (conventional spoken dialogue).

We also watched the local film, Autograph Book. It was pretty interesting although I kept looking out for interesting dialogue was never spoken. However, only during the discussion did I realise the importance of dialogue that seemed normal and uninteresting to me. They not only intensify the mood of the film, but also displayed the emotions of the characters. Simple yet impactful lines were the main source of motivation in the film.

Week 5 reflections

Today’s storytelling lesson began with us doing critics on the works of of the chosen ones, Annabelle, Sin and Caleb, not forgetting me, on a quest to refine our literary kungfu to the finest. Now let’s take a look at the evaluation of our performances.

Annabelle – The Little Rat – The story is about Nicole’s brother taking out the birthday cake ornament, licking it and putting it back onto the cake.

My opinions- Simple actions bring out the character of the Nicole’s brother who is the lead character in the story which shows and not tells us what he is. The choice of vocabulary (Keyword: scamper) and title of the story brings a clear focus upon the main character.

Comments by Others

  1. Lack of clarity
  2. Lack of focus on main character. (That I would argue to be untrue due to its title and the title’s link to the word “scamper” in the story)

Sin – Speed Demon

My opinions: Clear description of main character’s actions and a very 1st person point-of-view brings us into the story and into the shoes of the main character which is the strength of the story. However, I feel that more dialogue could be added in as part of his internal conversation with his own mind to make a more interesting storyline and at the same time create a more intense mood using a form of contact that is more intimate. (eg: “I’m gonna overtake that guy.”).

Comments by others:

  • Great focus is on main character.
  • More focus could be placed on developing the character rather than just plainly developing the storyline for the audience to know more about the character.

This one is by me so i would not have the chance to comment about all the wonderful stuff about this amazing story. Oops.

Caleb – The Wedding

My opinions: :Lacks linkage between events, seems more like scenes in a film more than a story on paper

Week 4 reflections

> Para 1- Summary of the perilous journey we took to watch the film

> Para 2- Film summary.

> Para 3 onwards- Film analysis

Para 1: This week’s storytelling lesson could be titled “A series of unfortunate events”. First of all, the rooms which Mr Ryan had booked were occupied by people whom I would classify under miscellanous. From Mr Ryan’s face, I could see traces of frustration concealed by the cool and calmness of a teacher. Perharps I was too involved in people watch but it is still highly understandable due to late-comers and the unfortunate turn out of events. After which, we proceeded to the preview theatre to watch the show “Election”. However, we only had the area til 5pm and had to evacuate the area 15 minutes before the show ended. The heavy suspense was unbearable as the resolutions were unrevealed as we made our way to the 7th floor to continue with the show. Eventually, after much technical complications in the meeting room, we got to finish the show and began to discuss the film. Now, I shall begin on the learning points and evaluation of the discussion after watching the film “Election”.

Para 2: The story of “Election” begins with a girl named Tracy Flick, who is an over-achiever in school. However, she has been featured in a scandal with a teacher who was a close friend of the main character, Jim McCalister. Going on, Jim finds himself in a complex situation both in his private life and in school. In school, he tries to stop Tracey from becoming the high school president, yet at the same time, he lands himself in a struggle to maintain his morality and ethics, the social behaviour and attitude he preaches. At the same time, in his private life, he faces yet another challenge. While trying to convince himself that he has a wonderful relationship with his wife and desparately trying to bear a son, he falls in love with his friend’s ex-wife, Linda. They then had an affair to satisfy their emotional and sexual desires and needs. One day, Linda decided to end this relationship by confessing to Jim’s wife about their relationship. Jim’s life then took a turn with the end of his marriage. After which, many events occured and Jim resigned as he was found tampering with the election votes. It was a fresh start for him as he lost everything and decided to lead a new life altogether again.

Para 3: The film “Election” seem like a Greek tragedy to me. This is due to the character suffering serious misfortune which demonstrated the fragility of humans. This can be seen the struggle Jim faces in the show. Although he preaches to his students and even to his buddy, Dave, about ethics and morals, as well as how Dave is committing the wrong actions by having an affair with his student Tracy, he eventually falls into the trap of adultery himself. This shows how feeble humans are as it demonstrates how vulnerable they are to troubles they already know of.

Part 4: The plot is also similar to that of a Greek tragedy as it sparks off the whole issue at the beginning that goes on for the entire show, it sets the cause and effect for the entire movie. The main event of the story that went on for almost the entire show and sparked off the cause-and-effect chain would be the election. It posed as a challenge to the main character, Jim’s morality and the set of values and behavioural conduct he always trusted. On top of that, it provided the ground for argument of other problems in the show such as the conflicts within the Metzler family and the electoral competitions.*

Para 5 – Fufilment of 6 parts of a Greek tragedy.

1. Plot : The fufilment of the beginning (spark of cause-and-effect chain = election), middle (climax = his affair was discovered, his plot against tracey was found out), end (resolution = he began a new life and started afresh)

2. Visual adornment : None that was exceptionally impactful but overall, bright colours was used in the show. (Eg: Jim’s car)

3. Diction : How Tracey argued against Jim – When he interrogates her about the tearing of the election posters. The lines were well-written as we can see how Tracey, at a disadvantaged position, managed to rebut against Jim and even address some of the issues Jim was facing.

4. Characters : Character began as a morally upright educator who eventually led to dug his own grave as the cause (election) puts him to great test and crushes him (effect). Character supports the plot as the election tested his ethics with his motives (to make the school better place).

5. Melody : Music that created great feel of the mood of the movie in different parts. (Timing of the music/Type of music)
6. Thought : The election theme, although self-contained, sparked off many other issues in the story. This shows the thought put into the film as it provided a common ground for the issues in the show to be addressed and developed according to the characters.

Para 6 – Katharsis – In this show, we become more intensely intimate and close to the characters when we begin to fear that some unfortunate events might actually happen to us. As this goes on, a natural discomfort of fear and pity builds up within us. At the end of the show, where the main character is actually able to start afresh, these emotions were purged from us as we feel relieved that these problems still have their solutions, a sense of optimism so as to say. It cleanses the emotions built up within us as we feel for the main characters and experience his fears.

Para 7 – However, in this movie, I do have some confusion as to whether it is actually an episodic story. This is because I am unable to see the link between the troubles he faces in school and the those he faces in his personal life. Although both of these experiences serve as tests to his morality, they do not actually connect to one another in terms of storybuilding. As such they do not develop the storyline furthur when combined as seen in the story. In my opinion, the writer had used both of these experiences only to create a more impactful katharsis as our sympathy towards the main character will be of a larger extend.

Week 3

sorry i was absent.

Week 2 reflections

He wakes up on Tuesday and realises that it is Hari Raya! As he embraces this occasion with love and joy, he jumps out of bed delightfully and proceeds to his regular holiday ritual. Brushing, bathing ,eating , drinking, followed by a whole day of gaming. Oh, what a fun-filled day he had! Until one fateful day, some call it doomsday, others call it the day after tomorrow, since then, it has been named thursday. On this catastrophic diurnal course, he finally realises what had been missing from his life all this time. Tragedy strikes, as fast as lightning, loud as thunder, he meets 2 people who changed his life forever, hot hari and annoying annabelle. “Remember remember..31st of October, present Aristotle or you shadn’t be pardoned ” He, was none other than Lee.

Ok, that was a short summary of my eventful week, week 2, and how I got a shock upon realising the presentation we have to complete by week 3. That’s the end of my reflections, bye bye.

Week 1 Reflections =D

Thank you mr ryan for making the first story telling lesson so enjoyable =D. Well well, to be honest, I haven’t had any idea what story telling was at start but the mere rumours about it being a written module, which somehow rhymes with written communication, haunted me even before I entered class. However, I must say that story telling lessons are definitely far more exciting as well as interesting, and I’m definitely looking forward to more story telling classes. Not only did I have had fun during story classes, there were several learning points and experiences I picked up during class.

As I am so accustomed to writing in the past tense for the narratives I used to write in secondary school, I could hardly write in present tense at all during the class. However, through some struggling, I managed to write a short story based on Louis in hula girl outfit. It was kind of fun, and through this form of writing, I learnt that it was much more engaging as it sets the readers into the scene themselves as provides them with a much more fufilling experience reading my stories. Also, writing in the active speaker form also adds a touch of excitement to the story due to the more direct approach. (eg. Passive form: He was shot by the robber from the back. Active form: The robber shot him from the back.)

Other than the things that was taught during tutorial, I had several learning experiences while covering the story of “Hula Louis”. I have learnt that it is sometimes difficult to have the full story in my mind when I have just started on a story, ideas are often developed and adopted along the way. Moreover, from I have learnt that story ideas I develop are often jumbled up in terms of chronological sequence, but it is alright as I can slowly connect the dots and make sense of them all to give my readers an intriguing experience. From sharing experiences with my fellow classmates, I have also learnt that it is always important to think of ideas that can engage and attract readers rather than just writing without thinking. That’s all for my reflections and I’m looking forward to the next story telling lesson ^.^ .

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